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Posted: Sun Jun 24, 2012 9:46 am
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Posted: Sun Jun 24, 2012 6:07 pm
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First off, her last name needs six letters. :U
Secondly, if you're changing her outfit to "blend in more", please make it show by changing the pictures we see to take as first impressions of her. I can't tell if the lime green-cantaloupe fiasco is supposed to be her main or alternate, but it implies that it's her main outfit by how many times it shows up and how it's the first thing anyone sees. And I could easily go into paragraphs about how many problems there would be with that, including things other people haven't covered. It's just really, really unacceptable. D: (And the color combo seriously hurts my eyes)
Third, her symbol needs to be in a clear spot on her outfit. I have to squint to see it on her sprite, and it's not even showing on her drawn art! While it doesn't have to be front-and-center, it should be around the general chest area and visible, you know? On her lime green-cantaloupe fiasco outfit, I don't know if it's a symbol or design or a stain or mistake. On the gray one, it practically blends in for me.
Bio crit time: -Why does she like color so much as to have a MISSION for it? What IS bad about the other colors about Alternia? As said, a movie poster doesn't cut it because they lack color like most things Alternia. How are black and gray eyesores if they're what she grew up with? Did she see a lot of blood or tears growing up? In an abandoned place like Old Hemisect, that's probably the only way she's seen anything beyond black, gray, and her own/her lusus' blood color. -If she gets whiny and annoying around authority figures if she's not eating candy, she'll get in trouble and possibly get herself culled before she can grow up to 'introduce color to the bland world'. Does she ever try to hold back, or does she not care about her own well-being at all? -Speaking of, what would she DO exactly that would bring color to Alternia while also being productive to troll society? -Those shoes look awful for walking on a beach. Just saying. -What inspired her to make any kind of eye shadow in the first place? -What if she hits someone STRONGer than her and ends up breaking her own fist? Would she learn from that or keep hitting and break more parts of herself and possibly risk being culled? -Her horns are neat. I like them.
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Posted: Sun Jun 24, 2012 9:08 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2012 5:41 pm
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