Critiques please? :D

[--Untoten Kase--]

With all my fury, every inch of pain
This violent anger tearing us away
Hate, destruction, human consumption
Creates division, blinded in vision

I haven't drawn really anything without a tutorial or a base in a while, so I tried it using a different method than before. But I need a real artist's critique so I can get better c:

So, how is it in ALL honesty?

Raging like the wave, crashing to its place
Such violent delights have violent ends
So furiously, my insanity, trapped in vanity
Scrounged in desire, raging like a fire

 

[xxXSleepy_NinjaXxx]

its alright. 6/10
the shading and the coloring are really nice. i don't think you have a problem there.
body proportions can be worked on a bit.
the neck feels long and heavy for her head compared to her body.
and the arms are funky looking.
...x.x i'm not really good at critiquing.. so this is all i have to say.

 

[--Untoten Kase--]

xxXSleepy_NinjaXxx

its alright. 6/10
the shading and the coloring are really nice. i don't think you have a problem there.
body proportions can be worked on a bit.
the neck feels long and heavy for her head compared to her body.
and the arms are funky looking.
...x.x i'm not really good at critiquing.. so this is all i have to say.

With all my fury, every inch of pain
This violent anger tearing us away
Hate, destruction, human consumption
Creates division, blinded in vision

Thank you! I'll work on it c:
But really? the shading's good? o.o I just guessed where it would go... xD

Raging like the wave, crashing to its place
Such violent delights have violent ends
So furiously, my insanity, trapped in vanity
Scrounged in desire, raging like a fire

 

[Magezian]

I'm curious, but are you doing pixel? Well, you got the basics. It's quite good for a beginner. You may need to look at references and a few tutorials on the anatomy, since the head is a bit big compared to the body.