Prologue ...

[Emmerah]

An Idea I've had for a while. I'm aware that it needs editing, but I have no clue what to change. Read the prologue and tell me if you think it's worth continuing. Please comment, feel free to flame, as long I get something useful out of it! I also need suggestions for a title...

This is the story of an ancient warrior, who’s legend has been handed down for centuries.
She lived only to fight. Never giving in, always undefeated. She fought with eyes like steel, unfeeling, but they told a story, to any who had the time to perceive it, of unspeakable sorrow. Her blade was ruthless, as were her fists. As her opponents lay still she’d shed a single tear for each of them and kiss each one on the forehead. ‘I’m sorry’ she’d say, then turn her back to the battle field.
This is the story of how she came to be, and of how she left the world behind.
 

[Joonbong]

I don't think she should be undefeated. Maybe put a defeat somewhere in there along the story. It would be really interesting. At this moment (maybe it's too early to judge), but she seems like an almost perfect person (not character). To give her some more character and realisticness and to have the reader bond with her more effectively, I think she should have some flaws. Maybe you have that planned out already though. xD And I'm not so great on titles, so I can't really help you there. But yeah, I really think you should write this. biggrin  

[wolfs shepard]

It sounds like a good idea. I'm with Joon on this.