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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 6:17 am
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 12:36 pm
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 1:58 pm
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Very touching, I absolutely loved it. I really enjoyed the similes you use:
Quote: Like a rapier, loneliness plunges deep Straight to my very core
Very deep and impressionable words. I also like your phrasing, however, (bear in mind I too am guilty of this) with a poem of this calliber, one should not end a phrase with a preposition. In one line you end with the word "for" and start a new thought afterwords. I am being extremely nitpicky here, so it's really no big deal if you neither see it or fix it. Actually, in poetry, it might not be a mistake since you have more freedom with what you right. Ugh, now I have to look it up.
Anyway, it's a great poem, as is most of your work, and I would love to read more!
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 4:10 pm
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Posted: Tue Mar 30, 2010 4:44 pm
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