Requiem For The Departed

[Skyraa]

Requiem for the Departed/Plea for those that Remain

The Lightning crackled as it hit the ground
Sizzling the flower where it stood
Then retreated with a hint of a snicker
And, with a second, sashaying flash, the lightning was gone for good
In its wake, the daisy petals fell to ash
And seeped into the solemn soil
About the stricken flower
Dew dripped down lush green pinpricks with tops tipped respectfully south
Like mournful tears trailing
Cutting their way down wan flesh
A Daisy died away, while Thunder boomed its Triumph.  

[EstoPerpetua]

A very vivid tail. I can clearly hear and see what is going on. This is the kind of work where I can clearly imagine the way a person saying this aloud might sound. This is more a well rhythmed story than a poem for me anyway. (I am being very hypocritical here because this is the way most of my work sounds. I am trying very hard to fix it, but it's not really working.)

Anywho, no matter what it is by definition, this is a very fascinating piece of work which I thoroughly enjoyed reading. I'd love to see more of your work in the future!