My Tortured Soul (Move to Poetry plox)

[Xahmen]

Life is like a box of chocolates
Filled with bloody filling stuff
And I can't
Help
But
Hate Myself
And I take the knife to my heart
Stabbing Pain
Just to feel alive
I slit my wrists
Watch the blood gush
Deep Crimson
Like the forbidden fruit
I am drawn to it
Will I take a bite?
I hate this
And no-

...

That first line just made me want chocolate
I really want chocolate
Holy s**t
Now I'm just thinking about Chocolate
OH NO NEVERMIND WAIT
I can still be dark

Bats swirl around me
Like some horrific carousel
I'm lost in the mirror hall
Shadows twist around me
As they shatter at my feet
Cutting into me
Deep

And I still... Want... Chocolate <********
Nevermind  

[Whisper Gently]

xd
EPIC.

 

[IY_and_MCR]

i relly like how i can fell ur pain and gr8 use of imagrey  

[SADERR]

Poem itself - didn't like it. Too overdone. Cut your wrists to feel alive. Go to emo guild pl0x.

BUT.
The whole "now i want chocolate".
If that was actually a part of the poem, (said differently) it would be VERY interesting.
But that's just my opinion. Don't take it for too much, I'm only one person.
Keep at it. ^-^  

[Xahmen]

Jonathonn

Poem itself - didn't like it. Too overdone. Cut your wrists to feel alive. Go to emo guild pl0x.

BUT.
The whole "now i want chocolate".
If that was actually a part of the poem, (said differently) it would be VERY interesting.
But that's just my opinion. Don't take it for too much, I'm only one person.
Keep at it. ^-^

 

[Henneth Annun]

IY_and_MCR

i relly like how i can fell ur pain and gr8 use of imagrey

lol i know rite?

uber gothik.

@Jonathonn: Really?  

[Not Streetlight Fights]

This poem is terrible!
Thank goodness he was banned if he was passing this stuff off as art in my beloved Gothic Guild!  

[PetreyDish]

Streetlights, there's no need to be an a**.  

[Not Streetlight Fights]

DancesWithBats

Streetlights, there's no need to be an a**.

No he's clearly mocking what it means to be Goth!
Well good riddance I say, I'm sure this guild is better off without him.  

[Henneth Annun]

Not Streetlight Fights

DancesWithBats

Streetlights, there's no need to be an a**.

No he's clearly mocking what it means to be Goth!
Well good riddance I say, I'm sure this guild is better off without him.

He's not mocking what it means to be goth, he's just mocking bad stereotypical poetry.  

[Not Streetlight Fights]

Henneth Annun

Not Streetlight Fights

DancesWithBats

Streetlights, there's no need to be an a**.

No he's clearly mocking what it means to be Goth!
Well good riddance I say, I'm sure this guild is better off without him.

He's not mocking what it means to be goth, he's just mocking bad stereotypical poetry.

Hm, well maybe I guess, but it's still offensive.
lolimhim  

[PetreyDish]

...How?  

[-Resurrected Writer-]

OGAWD ITS LIKE HE KNOS WHAT IM GOING ******** CHOKLIT MAN.