My horror show --Poem--

[Gothique Jedi]

Silent screams and faces
Streaked with tears
Darkest nights and too
Many broken fears

Blank stares and
Creepy laughs
Dark figures missing
Their better halves

Broken bones and
Ticking clocks
Shadows waiting
For the Equinox

New founded sorrows with
Dark pools and floods
Lost souls
Bound by blood

Tormented screams
Echoing through the night
Demented demons
Waiting to take flight

Mouths sewn shut with
Blood in a steady flow
Welcome to my
Horror Show

Feedback??  

[Official Gothic Chick]

OH MY GOD! I love it!  

[Xahmen]

This is terrible, and I hate it.  

[Xahmen]

Zahmen II

This is terrible, and I hate it.

I mean, I really really hate it.  

[Xahmen]

Zahmen II

Zahmen II

This is terrible, and I hate it.

I mean, I really really hate it.

No seriously.
Your meter is poor, your flow is wonky and juvenile, and your imagery is so overbearing that it's laughable.

Also, "The Equinox"?
What, do your generic shapeless "goffic" beings really have a hard on for Easter?  

[Necrodancer Ghost]

Zahmen II

Zahmen II

Zahmen II

This is terrible, and I hate it.

I mean, I really really hate it.

No seriously.
Your meter is poor, your flow is wonky and juvenile, and your imagery is so overbearing that it's laughable.

Also, "The Equinox"?
What, do your generic shapeless "goffic" beings really have a hard on for Easter?

This.

Official Gothic Chick

OH MY GOD! I love it!

Your screen name scares the hell out of me.

This message is brought to you in part by the Give Razors to Emos Foundation
Eradicating at least 24 idiots a day.

 

[Xahmen]

Zahmen II

Zahmen II

Zahmen II

This is terrible, and I hate it.

I mean, I really really hate it.

No seriously.
Your meter is poor, your flow is wonky and juvenile, and your imagery is so overbearing that it's laughable.

Also, "The Equinox"?
What, do your generic shapeless "goffic" beings really have a hard on for Easter?

Cry some more.
Just kidding.
Not really.
Cry some more.
Canada sucks.  

[Whisper Gently]

So deep.
rolleyes