just a poem i wrote

[Whips+Chains]

Bring Me The Night

In this world
Filled with light
Am I the only one
Who cries in fright
I want to scream
I want to run
I want your screaming
To finally be done
I am of the dark
A demon of the night
I do not belong
To this world of light
I am not the Devil's
I am not from hell
I'm just a whore
One you can sell
I do what they ask
The world or just you
I am what you want
Tell me what to do
I'll be your servant
A forever slave
Only if you promise
It's me you'll save
Please save me
Banish the light
This is my nightmare
Bring me the night  

[_Built_to_Offend_666]

not bad at all. smile  

[Whips+Chains]

thanks, i got some very ... um... harsh results from it in the big poetry place and... owie. someone was going on about how i was a "whinny goth". sorry that's been hurting for awhile. sweatdrop  

[OverlordMMM]

..its pretty nice.....not excellent...but it is nice....

as for the poetry forum...they butcher people when it comes to darker aspects....if you write a I've seen people write very good darker poems that were executed.....and simple lighter poems of lesser quality of the same subject praised....thats why I don't post there....  

[cuddlefish_Breezy]

Sensitive people tend to get defencive about what makes them "unique" that's why people bash perfectly good poetry somtimes. I give you a two thumbs up!