waddya think of these lyrics i wrote?

[_Built_to_Offend_666]

HIBERNATION

Welcome to the palace of malice
Welcome to the home of the dead man's foam
Enter at your own risk
You could be killed in a whisk
No one blames the man that fears
This place has only one gear
Out of your world you'll disappear
Killing the herd that interferes
And while you are here
Claim a nice and obcene souvenir
Come see the premier
Of the show that will give you tears
It will haunt your dreams and make you veer
Are you afraid of this new frontier?
I am inside waiting for you
There is no reason to try and construe
Worlds that wait you'll slip into
Nothing here is ever true
This will open your eyes to other views
After this you'll want death in lieu
This will give you a mental tattoo

Open the door
This hate you'll adore
It'll make you feel sore
You won't want to feel anymore

I am inside waiting for you
Waiting for you to witness
It's you these horrors will caress
Submit to the conversion
Or face new forms of perversion
There is no way of aversion
You'll be stricken by repulsive diversions
There is no way from this incursion
Now its time to confront subversion
Your life is now in the process of inversion

Open the door
This hate you'll adore
It'll make you feel sore
You won't want to feel anymore

Everyone should be afraid
Once they face the blade
Your mind will feel betrayed
This hate will now invade
You'll want to be unmade
Dose of deathly serenade
No way to evade
Your life has now decayed
Outside this is all charade
Subliminal brigade
You soul will be surveyed
Blasphemous masquerade
Obeying a savage tirade
You will never be the same
This hell will now take aim
You have your world to blame
Your playing a violent game
That cannot be tamed
Its now aflamed
And you'll be maimed

Open the door
This hate you'll adore
It'll make you feel sore
You won't want to feel anymore
Open the door
This hate you'll adore
It'll make you feel sore
You won't want to feel anymore
No way to ignore
This conflict comes prewar
A new level of hardcore

I am inside waiting for you
To rape your mind with the truth
I am inside waiting for you
I am inside waiting for you!

 

[Tragedy-K]

creepy... confused ..but good  

[H e ll f ii r e]

i think its amazing! did you write it yourself? are you in a band? i think you could get signed with a single like that 3nodding  

[_Built_to_Offend_666]

Hellfire Kitty

i think its amazing! did you write it yourself? are you in a band? i think you could get signed with a single like that 3nodding

thanx for the compliment biggrin . i did write it, like all my lyrics, by myself. and im not quite in a band yet, but im trying to form one right now actually.  

[zanza135]

dude, hiko, what can i say, ... maybe this... "u crazy son-of-a-gun"
keep up the awesome work mrgreen  

[-Lasciate Ogni Speranza-]

You've got serious talent.