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Fyrewalle

PostPosted: Sun Nov 01, 2009 7:00 pm
Thinkin bout the memories, and times we used to fight

It makes me crawl in deeper, and cry out into the night.

Alone in this world is no real place for me,

looking for the answers and the dawn where i shall bleed.



Our lives are simply changing and crashing up along.

All against our loved ones, and people we leaned upon.

Further grows on steady, as life just ticks away.

Taking back our memories, and the times we had today.


As no one can see our future, or tell us about the past.

We live in every hour, just trying to make it last.



You live on inside of me, and life just ticks away.

Carrying off our memories, and the fights with yesterday.

I wont be whole without you, i need you next to me,

for me to hold onto and to feel inside my dreams.

We've taken up our spirits, and just locked them all away,

destroyed with them the feelings that were left here yesterday.



Oh as life just tick's away.


life just tick's away.



You became my thunder, i became your shield,

was looking out to fend for the danger we all wield.

You are my dependence, and you are not to blame,

do you hear me down here calling out your name.




You live on inside of me, as life just tick's away,

ill protect you from things to come throughout the day.




You live on inside of me every single day, as life just tick's away.



life just tick's away.



life just tick's... away



You live on inside of me, as life just tick's away...  
PostPosted: Sun Nov 01, 2009 7:03 pm
Very song like. I like it! Only critique I have is to look more at punctuations... I think some of the periods might be better suited as commas. Great job rhyming!  

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