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Time's Journey

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Jeyrin

PostPosted: Tue Oct 06, 2009 7:29 pm
(Fresh off the press! I just finished this a few minutes ago! Please comment with critism and tell me what you think!
It's not as long as long as my usual poems are, but I think I'm happy with the result nonetheless.)

If time indeed does fly,
As so many swear it can,
Then, my friend, please do try,
To tell me when it’s flight began.

Exactly where does time go,
And how long does it stay?
I suppose it doesn’t matter though,
Because time is every day.

I don’t understand your thoery,
On how exactly time flies,
But when time comes for takeoff,
I’m getting weary of goodbyes.

I would just like to spare a moment,
Or maybe two with you.
But the time is stolen from us,
And the minutes seem so few.

Maybe one day we can travel with time,
And soar with the stars.
It doesn’t matter to me,
As long as the moments are ours.

 
PostPosted: Tue Oct 06, 2009 10:28 pm
very nice. I really cant see anything that needs to be changed/improved. Do you have any more poems on here that i may have missed? I'd love to read some more of your writing.  

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Jeyrin

PostPosted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 8:01 pm
Rock4ourRock
very nice. I really cant see anything that needs to be changed/improved. Do you have any more poems on here that i may have missed? I'd love to read some more of your writing.
Yes, I do have something else posted here. It's another poem called Broken Wishes. (You could also check out my gallery in the arenas to read it). I'm going to be posting more stuff in the guild soon too. I'm glad you liked it!! It means a lot!
 
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