The over and under use of a comma?

[-xX_Restless_Xx-]

So when do I know that I've used too many commas and need to start a new sentence? When do I know I'm lacking one?

Here's an example of my work:

Quote:

He knew the only reason he was even allowed to drink underage, even by only a measly year, and find beautiful women to sleep with was because he was famous and he had talent, but that was more than good enough for him.

He just knew that Annabelle was madly in love that thing and it completely closed off any chance he ever had.

 

[Ookami hime95]

Hmmmmmm.....I'm not sure how to answer. sweatdrop  

[-xX_Restless_Xx-]

It's fine. I'm just really bad when it comes to commas.  

[Ookami hime95]

I am too, most of the time. sweatdrop  

[Yeshaya Silver]

A comma is an unofficial pause in a sentence. Therefore, when you want a slight lull in your sentence, add a comma. Helps to say it out loud if you're iffy.

"She looked over at the tall blue mountains wistfully wondering when she'd get there."

Goes to

"She looked over at the tall, blue mountains wistfully, wondering when she'd get there."

That help?  

[-xX_Restless_Xx-]

Yes, thank you!  

[Ookami hime95]

Um...I think those are comma splices.  

[Yeshaya Silver]

Pardon? Lol.  

[Ookami hime95]

It's a comma that is not supposed to be where you put them.  

[Christine Alina]

I think you guys should have an guild explaining the Grammar, instead of answering people questions in posts.

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And then make an example explaining.  

[Crossing The Frames]

Eternity Eclipse

A comma is an unofficial pause in a sentence. Therefore, when you want a slight lull in your sentence, add a comma. Helps to say it out loud if you're iffy.

"She looked over at the tall blue mountains wistfully wondering when she'd get there."

Goes to

"She looked over at the tall, blue mountains wistfully, wondering when she'd get there."

That help?

Ookami hime95

Um...I think those are comma splices.

Hm. I don't think those are comma splices, for neither of the phrases - that were divided by commas - could stand itself as a sentence: Independent clause. Thus, she separated them as to not form a run-on sentence. Comma splices occurs when two independent clauses are joined by commas, without being linked by a coordinating conjunction. (for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so)

Example:

The car stopped moving, it ran out of gas.

Notice these two independent clauses can very much stand upon itself as a simple sentence, and comma isn't strong enough to divide them. You can either add a coordinating conjunction appropriate to this situation, or try using other punctuations that are more powerful than a comma.

The car stopped moving, for it ran out of gas.

The car stopped moving. It ran out of gas.

The car stopped moving; it ran out of gas.

There is also another way to clear off the comma splice issue by making one of the clauses dependent.

Right when the car stopped moving, it ran out of gas.

Taking consideration to Soundra Starfire's advice, I think it is one of the many possibilities that will solve your individual problems in Grammar.  

[-xX_Restless_Xx-]

I see. (Now I see why my English literature teacher was demoted; he didn't explain the "fanboys" properly. )

Thank you all for your help. ^-^ I think I now have a good idea of how to separate sentences with commas.  

[Crossing The Frames]

Your welcome ^0^, I wish you luck on your Role Playing.  

[Ookami hime95]

Sorry, it's summer vacation, I forgot how to use my brain. gonk

I'll remember everything once I get back to school.