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A Torrid Affair

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Skyraa

PostPosted: Wed Jul 15, 2009 6:11 pm
Brutal Wings Beat
A Torrid Affair
Sweat beads
Hair clings
Arms wrapping tight
clinging through the sweltering night
forbidden lust shadowing
over pearl white

Scruples pull
Insecurities tug
Sweetness releasing
Silence resounding
Awkwardness inside forever pounding.

Fevers burn and Chills wrack
Lust Clouds and Fogs
No turning back

Moans give way to tears
Then tension fraught air
In A moment of Weakness
Hormones bind
Like friendship of the falsest mind

With a cry
Bondage dissolves
A silence of the Loudest kind
Coming to being
before cleared eyes

Rippling out
The stone is thrown
The die cast
Tears fall and Loss resumes as Time takes past

A sweltering room
Steamed air
A moment of pleasure
A lifetime of pain
The worst being
No one but self to blame

No
A hard word to say
But worth the effort
To avoid such pain

A Torrid Affair
A blasphemous rite
For shivers of delight which climb the spine
Quickly take leave given a moments time
Breath Will Calm
Shakes Will Stop
But give in to Passion
And you'll fall hard from the top

Heat and Steam
Feeling so nice
Always prepare for the turn
from intense pleasure
To pain, loss, and spite

No Torrid Affair
Is worth such a risk
Take Heed not chances
And Ignore the warmth
For it is too much to lose
for a simple ride upon a "disco stick".  
PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2009 6:23 am
Interesting choice of words through out.... I feel like the meaning behind this poem is a little jumbled though. I'm not sure what it is, but for me it doesn't quite flow just right. Also, the capitalization kind of threw me off a lot. You did have some great phrases in here though... "Arms wrapping tight clinging through the sweltering night" is one of my favorite lines. For stanza, I really adore "Fevers burn and chills wrack, lust clouds and fogs, no turning back". Keep writing! You've got an amazing start. Just tweak it a little. ^_^  

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2009 11:28 pm
I agree with the interesting choice of words...

all about a night of lustful passion, then he walks away from you the next day, am i correct?

i dig this = )  
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