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Posted: Tue Mar 31, 2009 3:01 am
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Hi.. this is a poetry i made for my bigger 'sister' that I haven't met for a long time..and she's coming to my place. You know it's reaally hard to make a poem for someone. You don't want it to be really cheesy, and stuff, but it has to still have some meaning.. And you can't make things up to make it more dramatic and stuff.. So please give some comments or opinion on my writing,, thanks.. ^^ P.S. I put it up in the arena, but it doesn’t rate that high, can you please tell me how could I improve it? Thanks soo much..
* Through time Back then, holding back tears Would you looked in my watery eyes You’d see a bit of fear beyond my sorrow A bit of hope, beyond my broken smile Well it doesn’t matter now
Through distance Across oceans and open skies Unseen, unheard through the vastness Hopes emerged Could your presence be near? Faith believing I’m still hoping
Through space Converse without a sound Without sights of each Whisper to thee For screaming is worthless
Through faith I know and believe For time broadens And distance spreads Our amity still remains, nevertheless True
Through all Long lost and unspoken Curiousity still revolves How are you?
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Posted: Sat Apr 11, 2009 10:04 am
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