[40K] Solid Ice

[Mat]

This is somthing I wrote for one of my Black Crusade Special Characters awhile back and I removed one last bit that has been changed in my fluff. It needs a bit of editing which I dont care to do at the moment.

Orks. Vile creatures they are. They pollute whatever they touch with the filth of their existance. Now they touch my world, and they shall pay the price. They shall pay the price in their blood."

Cannoness Amerle sat alone in her Rhino transport listening to the Tactical net. The Guard armour had just engaged the first of the orks in the Glacier passes and it looked that the fight was going well. But the weather was taking a turn for the worst. A Blizzard was coming down from the north and many of the tank commander were describing problems with their thermal aupexs. If it got any colder they would be completely useless. It did.

Later towards the evening, the Blizzard struck home. Armoured units with their sensors unusable turned to visual aquisition but it wasent looking good. Orks natural ability to survive any conditions was overwhelming the Guardsmen. They were rapidly falling back to her postion the final line of defense. Her sisters were ready. She had requested renforcements from General Benjamin and they would arrive early morning. They would have to survive until then.

The Armoured units had made it back for the most part intact but the Ork horde was on their heels. Many of the unit was now low on ammo. She ordered their arangment in a defence stature and left her rhino in the charge of her retinue. As he walked down into the defensive trenchs were her sisters and the brave guardsmen of Fensilar stood ready to defend their homes againt the oncoming Ork forces. She looked down onto a young guardsman newly conscripted by the look of him. He was shaking with fear as he stared out into the whiteout conditions of the blizzard. She placed her hand on his shoulder. "The Emperor is with you today brave one." She said to him, he turned to look upon her and instantly frozen at the realisation of who stood at his side. Now wiht resolve he turned back over the bunker determinedly scanning the snowfield. His lasgun cracked. She turned at look over the parapit when an ork corpse dropped on the slope. "All units repel attackers, repel attackers!" she shouted into the vox and guns on both sides opened fire.

She lost count of how many ork they had slain but the guardsmen still stood at her side, shouting profanitys at the orks as he killed them with deftly aimed shots from his lasgun. The fighting was getting close more than once now she had slain an ork who had made the mistake of jumpin into her section of the trench, with her powersword. The orks seemed to be focusing their attacking on the section in which she stood. She was soon to find out why as a Trukk emerged from the whiteout and slid to a halt before the trench. The orks warboss jumped from the back of the Trukk with his cybork bodyguards. She jumped over the trench lip sounding the attack as she fired her Inferno pistol at the first of the Cyborks. Beside her ran the guardsman, Seeing their display immediately all the defenders surged forward to meet the enemy hand to hand. She laugh as she danced death with the bulky forms of the orks parrying and thrusting killing one ork and turning to meet another. A power claw stuck her aside, she stood again dazed as looked upon the maw of the warboss as his raised his guns to finish her of when the guardsman smashed him in the head with the butt of his lasgun shattering the stock. But it didnt phase the warboss. He threw the guardsman aside, once again going for the Cannoness, but she had returned to her senses now and tried to take the warbosses head. But the warboss grabbed her arm with his power klaw and took to off above the elbow. The warboss still held her arm but not her other. As the boss open his mouth to give the Orks Waaaagh battle cry she placed the barrel of her inferno pistol in his mouth and fired. The boss dropped and snow swirrled all around.

She was found in the morning nearly frozen to death leaning againt the bosses trukk pulling the trigger on her pistol with the power pack expired. The cold had deadend her nerves and she no longer fealt the pain from her lost arm. The guardsman who had saved her from the boss was the one to find her. His name was Rey he was one of the few infantrymen to have survived. She was taken to the medicae were they replaced her arm with augmetic and her eye as well which had been lost as well but she failed to realize it. Nothing could be done to change her lips back for an unknown reason they stayed blue. She would fight again, so would her order.  

[Hoxtalicious]

The rise of Philip Rey, nice.

You might want to work on the structure and flow a bit though, it seems a tad clunky and lacking in moments, jumping from one part to the other instantly.  

[Mat]

yes will have to work on that later. As you have read my stuff before this one is probley the most near complete of any