please give me feed back on my story plot!

[yaqoi and kenshin fan]

please tell me if this plot sounds good

this is the srory of a boy of the age of 12 who is the ultimate weapon This is the story of how hori's life has been scrambled after the 3 year long war that began when hori was 9 years old. now he is the main target for the death bringers! will his fight for freedom and his life end in happieness or death? will the death bringers conquor the world?

as i said above the main charactor is hori

age: 12
hight: 5.3
weight:5 lbs
occupation:warrior
info:he is skilled with 2 swords
clan:toshiki
full name:hori toshiki
planet:kiara
year:1563
birthday:june 28, 1551
please comment  

[yaqoi and kenshin fan]

also, the beginning of it is on my profile in the about me section  

[el_luna88]

The story looks awesome but one thing that bugs me is that he is 5 lbs so wouldnt that mean hes as skinny as a stick?o_O  

[cyberghosty]

Sounds kewl, but it would be imposible for a 12 year old to be 5 pounds. The actual storyline looks pretty good. Good luck!  

[hakumei de ninja]

Ten-Ten 53

Sounds kewl, but it would be imposible for a 12 year old to be 5 pounds. The actual storyline looks pretty good. Good luck!

same here, hope you follow through and finish! wink