need an opinion on a song i wrote

[All But Forgotten]

so pm me and tell me what you think not in this form cause i probally wont be on



theres nothing sweet about it
shes acting crazy over one little thing
she needs to stop making such a big deal out of nothing
stop making such a big fit
nothing is wrong and she knows it
she shouldnt try getting attention like this
shes fake and she shows it
shes acting like someone she isn't



bridge:
she just dont see what they see
she doesnt see the act shes putting up

chorus:
love me love me she screams for attention
but all she gets is the back of everybody
look here look here look what im doing
but no one looks they just turn the other way

she rushes around wondering whats wrong
through the halls and in all the classrooms
no one replies and they just leave her in sighs
she falls on the floor in her bedroom (ohhh)
why why am i so dumb why doesnt anyone see
that i am just perfect

know everyone sees that the person they met first is
not who shes trying to be case she screams love me love me

chorus:  

[av74ever]

i think that it is more like a poem and not a song but it is still kind of okay