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[Ceveo]

+Dr. Faust+

Yoshaki

Well seeing as you guys aren't talking I'll just guess you didn't like it.

I just got done reading it... I like it it's quite a sad story. Actually, a few years back. I was dating a girl and she ran away from home. At the time I was still staying with my mother. I had a job, paid half the rent, but she wouldn't let her stay. Her parent weren't too fond of me either, so I took off with her. We spent days hopping from hotle to hotel on a checkbook that I had just closed the account on, I bounced about 1500 dollars in bad checks on a non- exsistant account. Eventually the cops came and took us both to jail. They called her parents, then took me home. Her parents still didn't like me, but they were glad I didn't have her living on the streets. We continued to see each other for awhile then things started to slowly fall apart. It was devastating to me at first, but eventually I moved on. Your story reminds me of that incident that happened so long ago. 3nodding

Ahh good....or wait not good. I'm not sure to be happy youliked it or sorta sad it brought back a bad mem. I based it on a dream really. That last part was the only part I remembered(him standing on the tree with his hand stretched out as thunder came down on him) and I decided to make a story around it.  

[Jhi-Jhi]

+Dr. Faust+

Jhi-Jhi

I can still feel the warmth of your smile.
Still long for your gentle touch.
Couldn't you stay for a while?
Baby I miss you so much.

I can still hear your laugh as I lay in bed.
I still feel your hands holding mine.
I can't get you out of my head.
Memories won't fade with time.

I still don't understand.
Why did you leave me?
You were my man.
But you decieved me.

I wanted to be together always.
Nothing could change my heart.
As I walk these lonely hallways,
I slowly fall apart.

I wanted you by my side.
Sitting in the living room.
To no one can I confide.
There's a sense of impending doom.

I will love you until the day I die.
I know my love is pure and true.
My reason to smile, my reason to cry.
All I that I need is you.

Just wrote that. whee I have more in my journal. Just go back a few pages. XD

That's pretty good. You could turn that in to a pretty decent song. Good luck with your new found love. It's a rare thimg to find these days. I hope it works out for you. 3nodding

Thank you =) One last poem before I leave. :3

You came into my life, when I felt like I wanted to die.
You made me smile, and took and the pain inside.
When I was with you, I no longer felt the need to cry.
It didn't matter to me anymore how he had lied.
You were my everything, my only reason to smile.
I even laughed with you every once in a while.
But I was constantly reminded of your love with her.
It hurt me so bad, how much more could I endure?
I took it all, the tears, and smiles, just to be with you.
Then when you lost her I knew what to do.
I didn't try to get with you, I was just there to listen to you talk of her lies.
And when that was done I was there to hear you cry.
I helped you through your tough times, as only a friend.
And I gave up on loving you, we'd be friends till the end.
As we grew closer to each other, it got harder for me.
Still wanting to be that lover of yours that I could never be.
I wanted so badly to stay with you, but it hurt too much.
Knowing I'd be there, but to never feel your touch.
So I gave up on getting your love, and I avoided you.
Three lonely months reminded me my love was true.
But I couldn't go back, it wouldn't be the same.
Then one day I heard you faintly call my name.
You asked me why we never talked anymore.
So we began to talk again, pain I would have to endure.
Ever so slowly you began to fall in love.
My soul was soaring higher then any dove.
I had loved you always, since the very start.
And now I too, had a place in your heart.
You were my light in the darkness of the years.
You were the sunlight that dried up my tears.
We slowly pulled each other into a strong bond.
This was how we should have been all along.
You held me tight in your arms promising to never let go.
You finally admitted to feelings you had never shown.
I confessed that I had fallen in love with you, you had me before hello.
I love you more then anyone could ever know.
Though you have made me cry and you have hurt me.
I pray everynight that you will never desert me.
I need you to be with me, even as just a friend.
You will always get my love, until the very end.
Every breath I take is yours, and yours alone.
Every word I say, only to you on the phone.
Every step I take, I'm getting closer to you.
You are the reason for everything I do.

Kinda long...pretty much sums up my entire relationship with the man I love with All my heart and all my soul.  

[Ceveo]

Jhi-Jhi

+Dr. Faust+

Jhi-Jhi

I can still feel the warmth of your smile.
Still long for your gentle touch.
Couldn't you stay for a while?
Baby I miss you so much.

I can still hear your laugh as I lay in bed.
I still feel your hands holding mine.
I can't get you out of my head.
Memories won't fade with time.

I still don't understand.
Why did you leave me?
You were my man.
But you decieved me.

I wanted to be together always.
Nothing could change my heart.
As I walk these lonely hallways,
I slowly fall apart.

I wanted you by my side.
Sitting in the living room.
To no one can I confide.
There's a sense of impending doom.

I will love you until the day I die.
I know my love is pure and true.
My reason to smile, my reason to cry.
All I that I need is you.

Just wrote that. whee I have more in my journal. Just go back a few pages. XD

That's pretty good. You could turn that in to a pretty decent song. Good luck with your new found love. It's a rare thimg to find these days. I hope it works out for you. 3nodding

Thank you =) One last poem before I leave. :3

You came into my life, when I felt like I wanted to die.
You made me smile, and took and the pain inside.
When I was with you, I no longer felt the need to cry.
It didn't matter to me anymore how he had lied.
You were my everything, my only reason to smile.
I even laughed with you every once in a while.
But I was constantly reminded of your love with her.
It hurt me so bad, how much more could I endure?
I took it all, the tears, and smiles, just to be with you.
Then when you lost her I knew what to do.
I didn't try to get with you, I was just there to listen to you talk of her lies.
And when that was done I was there to hear you cry.
I helped you through your tough times, as only a friend.
And I gave up on loving you, we'd be friends till the end.
As we grew closer to each other, it got harder for me.
Still wanting to be that lover of yours that I could never be.
I wanted so badly to stay with you, but it hurt too much.
Knowing I'd be there, but to never feel your touch.
So I gave up on getting your love, and I avoided you.
Three lonely months reminded me my love was true.
But I couldn't go back, it wouldn't be the same.
Then one day I heard you faintly call my name.
You asked me why we never talked anymore.
So we began to talk again, pain I would have to endure.
Ever so slowly you began to fall in love.
My soul was soaring higher then any dove.
I had loved you always, since the very start.
And now I too, had a place in your heart.
You were my light in the darkness of the years.
You were the sunlight that dried up my tears.
We slowly pulled each other into a strong bond.
This was how we should have been all along.
You held me tight in your arms promising to never let go.
You finally admitted to feelings you had never shown.
I confessed that I had fallen in love with you, you had me before hello.
I love you more then anyone could ever know.
Though you have made me cry and you have hurt me.
I pray everynight that you will never desert me.
I need you to be with me, even as just a friend.
You will always get my love, until the very end.
Every breath I take is yours, and yours alone.
Every word I say, only to you on the phone.
Every step I take, I'm getting closer to you.
You are the reason for everything I do.

Kinda long...pretty much sums up my entire relationship with the man I love with All my heart and all my soul.

After reading that let me tell you how I feel. I feel like ther is a whole in the pit of my somach. It is hard to breath right. My heart feels dead. That is what I feel only on rare occasions. That is one of the most beautiful things I have ever heard.  

[Jhi-Jhi]

Thank you. That really means alot to me. :3 I loved your story you posted by the way. It was sad at the end though =(  

[AnimeSeeker7]

bye bye jhi-jhi!
i'll miss ya..ur still a princess to me!  

[Naipalm]

i was at my grandpa's house a few day's after one of his friend's died and i wrote this poem while listining to coolio.....let me know what all of you think about it.


SEE YOU WHEN YOU GET THERE

You are scared
But then you learn, what am i to be afraid of
As time passes you see many new faces

Some come, some go
But they are still there
No matter where they are
You know they are there

In side they smile, outloud they say hi
Day to day they die, but do they??
In your everyday life, in your dream's
They are there smileing

Some sorrow or morn their death's
Some throw a party for the life they lived
But they are not gone, they wait
They watch because they know one thing

No matter how long it take's
They will see you in the the future
They will see you when you get there
If you ever get there.  

[fuasme]

wow...  

[Jhi-Jhi]

Slowly falling Apart...


Everytime I don't hear your voice,
I'm slowly falling apart.
It's like I don't have a choice,
but to slowly fall apart.

When I don't get to see your face
I'm slowly falling apart.
My mouth watering, I've lost all taste,
as I slowly fall apart.

When I don't get a fast reply,
I'm slowly falling apart.
Would it be better just to die.
instead of slowly falling apart?

When you sign off without saying goodbye
I'm slowly falling apart.
As I let out a soft sigh,
I realize I'm slowly falling apart.

Whenever you're not online,
I'm slowly falling apart.
My eyes have lost their shine,
because I'm slowly falling apart

You're my everything, nothing means anything without you
And I'm slowly falling apart.
My voice is soft and my smile is gone, what will I do?
With and without you, I'm slowly falling apart.

Being together, but being far away,
I'm slowly falling apart.
It gets harder everyday,
but nothing can change my heart.  

[XShadowMistressX]

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[Jhi-Jhi]

These poems are very pretty. :3

The days slowly go by,
and I start to wonder why
you haven't been on much.
I long for your touch.
Weeks pass and you're still gone.
I quietly wait and listen to our song.
I miss your voice baby.
I've been hurting so much lately.
Won't you come and make it better?
I'd be happy to see just one letter
pop up on my screen from you.
I miss you so much booh.
The months go by and by.
Openly I begin to cry.
I finally let everyone see
what's been bottled up inside of me.
I tried to wait for you, to be strong.
But I could only wait so long.
before I broke down.
Never to smile, only to frown.
Until one day I got your reply
I read it over and over again and prayed it was a lie.
My pain, my heart ache, my tears, I couldn't hide.
The message stated clearly "David has died."

Me and David had a conversation about that the other day. If one of us died the other wouldn't know...I couldn't help writing a poem about it...[no David didn't really die]  

[Naipalm]

Jhi-Jhi and XShadowMistressX i like both of your poem's both of you are very good i aplaud (im sure i spelt it wrong but you know what im saying). biggrin  

[Adonis Sang Raal]

This started out a lyrics but oh well here's the only thing I can pull off the top of my head....

You're on the road now,
you're wrapped around my finger,
Dancing to the tune of my choice.
You've made your bargian,
closed those pearly gates forever and you're going to pay the devil's price.
For what a career? A lifetime of fourtune and fame?
But what you have right now I'll take from you in pain.
You've crossed that line never to return, and your walking the devil's road.

Little dark but I kinda like it.  

[XShadowMistressX]

Forever Imprisoning Memory
Through someone else's eyes
I remain mesmerized
Looking through the broken mirror of the past
Hanging on to nothing but shattered glass

Wanting to go back
Needing to rip open hairling cracks
Leaving wounds unsealed
Believing I can always heal

Not being able to forget
On the verge of dying from regrets
I want to know
I want to rip the pain from my broken bones

Unwanted memories linger in my mind
Remembering you over and over seem to bind
Me to shattered pieves of before
Keeping me from breathing anymore

Constantly, the blood and glass relitter the floor
Incessantly, moaning ghouls wait outside my doors
Eternally, I am reminded by their cries
And the mirrors carved into my eyes

Wish I wrote this one a couple years ago so it may not be very good ^^;;Protect my purity
Guard me from cruelty
Blind me, be my eyes
Save me from my demise

Keep me in my ignorance
So I retain my innocence
So I can no longer see
The dark world around me

Sheild me from the truth
Keep me in your arms and soothe
Me when I cry
Protect me with your lies

My knowlege of the outside reduced to dust
I have no intellegence about what's just
Are you hungry for control?
To imprison my body and soul

Promises
I am your marionette
You are my master
Do you leave me broken?
Hanging by one string...?

I am your puppet
To experiment on
To do as you wish with
To lay at your feet and suffer
To follow your orders
And to torture

You play with my mind
My heart
My soul

You let me bleed away
You watch me die
You watch as I writhe beneath your burning white sun
And you watch me fade

Only to remember
That I was but a mere doll to you
For you to toy with
And rip me apart  

[Azrael the Mad]

I need you guys help... I'm starting a little thing in my journal. If you want the particulars, read the journal, but basically, I'm going to be writing a story that you guys will "help write" depending on the choices you make. Kinda like those "Choose your own Adventure" books. I was bored, and I started this out as a lark, but the problem is...NO COMMENTS ON MY JOURNAL. I need people to comment, or else I won't even BOTHER starting it. If you guys could read and comment on my journal, I'll love you forever. xd Well...I already DO, but you know what I mean. sweatdrop