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 Posted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 9:33 pm
here's one i wrote awhile ago.
memories left behind....
As time moves fast and goes by and by,
I am left here in your memories moved aside,
Until you come bak I'll never forget,
All the time we spent together that I'll never regret...
When I hear your voice inside my head,
Instead of tears,I put on a fake smile instead.
I laugh on the outside with a joyous breeze..
but in the inside the sadness makes me freeze.
I don't wanna be left alone without you in this state,
but I guess it's a fate I can't escape,
and now,all on my mind is about you.
When my smiles and happiness broke in two..
So as time moves fast and goes by and by,
I'll never forget the memories you brought inside.
Until you come back,I'll wait here while you forget....
I'll wait in your past....that I'll never regret...
idk if it's good,rate any1?
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 3:45 am
2DsGuitar here's one i wrote awhile ago. memories left behind....As time moves fast and goes by and by,
I am left here in your memories moved aside,
Until you come bak I'll never forget,
All the time we spent together that I'll never regret...
When I hear your voice inside my head,
Instead of tears,I put on a fake smile instead.
I laugh on the outside with a joyous breeze..
but in the inside the sadness makes me freeze.
I don't wanna be left alone without you in this state,
but I guess it's a fate I can't escape,
and now,all on my mind is about you.
When my smiles and happiness broke in two..
So as time moves fast and goes by and by,
I'll never forget the memories you brought inside.
Until you come back,I'll wait here while you forget....
I'll wait in your past....that I'll never regret...idk if it's good,rate any1?
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 9:59 am
automatic
i examine the people around me
trying to digest what makes them:
they are robots
stiff and expressionless
a state trancelike
and i feel
them brush absently like
white sounds of a factory,
but still examining
i make analogies:
these are grey beings
clutched on their work boxes,
in cardboard suits of authority,
crammed like dead sardines
in long moaning whales, exhaling fumes
to places they do not wish to go
but have no choice
they sigh
and i sigh.
(sighs of the whales)
And suddenly the train station
is empty again,
and I finally leave.
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 10:04 am
photographs
i dont believe
they don't just hold
images.
they capture feelings
and emotions
and details
otherwise forgotten:
the colour of a sky –
deep azure blue or
grey,
like silence
in a funeral?
the expression of a child –
a face of sunshine
or rain,
like a broken piñata?
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 6:45 pm
i think make poems in my head but never write them down sweatdrop
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Posted: Sun Jun 17, 2007 11:34 pm
Ever since i had to write a poem for my cousin, it`s really cool how to express yourself in words that some people can`t understand.
Now i`m starting to like writing poems. i`m not so good at those rhyming ones so i`m only working on free verse for now.
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 2:28 am
Michie`s Flips Inc. Ever since i had to write a poem for my cousin, it`s really cool how to express yourself in words that some people can`t understand.
Now i`m starting to like writing poems. i`m not so good at those rhyming ones so i`m only working on free verse for now.
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Posted: Mon Jun 18, 2007 11:11 pm
2DsGuitar ----->>
I read your poem, and its a great one too.
I enjoyed reading it.
It rhythms and everything all the words support what you wanted to say.
That is what I really liked about your poem.
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Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 8:47 pm
2DsGuitar here's one i wrote awhile ago. memories left behind....As time moves fast and goes by and by,
I am left here in your memories moved aside,
Until you come bak I'll never forget,
All the time we spent together that I'll never regret...
When I hear your voice inside my head,
Instead of tears,I put on a fake smile instead.
I laugh on the outside with a joyous breeze..
but in the inside the sadness makes me freeze.
I don't wanna be left alone without you in this state,
but I guess it's a fate I can't escape,
and now,all on my mind is about you.
When my smiles and happiness broke in two..
So as time moves fast and goes by and by,
I'll never forget the memories you brought inside.
Until you come back,I'll wait here while you forget....
I'll wait in your past....that I'll never regret...idk if it's good,rate any1? It's good, especially how you made the effort for it to rhyme. But I think you should work a bit more on how you send across your meaning, instead of trying to make it rhyme. My first few poems didn't rhyme, and it's just my recent ones that actually have a rhyming scheme. But then again, you could take it or leave it.
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Posted: Fri Jun 29, 2007 8:46 am
c H i c k e N P o o P 45 I write a lot of poems...I'm also just curious if any of you guys do too....cause i made one up and i want to share it...so here it is:
Sometimes,
It feels like the world is mine.
I wished you're always by my side.
I tried to hide,
My true feelings.
That didn't worked.
At times like these,
I wished I was on top of the world.
No one by my side,
Except for you.
When you smile, it makes me filled full of joy.
I just wish I could sleep in your arms,
By your side.
Even though this poem does not rhyme,
I want you to know,
This is how,
I really feel about you.
end.
so what do you think? wow ... ppl say ur poem is too simple no ryming n such rite? well they dunno poetry ur good its nice n simple poetry beginners can understand it n i rite poems like this too ... just dont wanna post it up ... not now ...
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