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Ephebe

PostPosted: Fri Jun 10, 2016 12:51 pm


nazriya ravnholm
SELF-SUFFICIENT TEASE

A sociable woman who likes gently teasing people and having a good laugh about life's oddities; her humour sometimes tends to the dry side, and despite being sociable she has a habit of bottling up the problems that hits closest to home. It's a habit from a lifetime spent trying to be the perfect responsible daughter - she doesn't like to burden others with her issues, not wanting to be a disappointment to those she loves.


BLEEDING HEART, BLEEDING OUT

Nazriya is one of life's great worriers; she takes looking after people very seriously because people are often s**t at looking after themselves and someone's gotta make sure they don't end up dead on the side of the road okay. Unfortunately this also means that she's often more concerned about helping out others, rather than helping herself or even letting herself be helped - and with a habit of bottling up her own personal issues, this isn't really the greatest thing in the world.

People often view her as a goody-two-shoes with a bleeding heart and they're not really wrong; with her tendency to stretch herself out trying to help people, Naz is frequently overwhelmed by the fact she just can't say no, even to helping out a person she barely knows. If people ask, it's because they really need the help, right? A mix of genuine care and a misplaced feeling of obligation will keep her helping out others long after she should have called a stop to it for her own sake, often leaving her with little time to take care of herself.

At some point she is going to have to set a boundary, find a line that she does not cross, but Nazriya has not found that yet and still keeps going. She's friendly, there for you, and great to be around but she's almost always two-steps away from crashing from over exhausting herself emotionally - and definitely not willing to admit it to your face.


GLITTERING STYLE

Nazriya always seems to have the perfect jewellery for her outfit on hand.


ANYTHING ELSE?

  • 26 years old
  • adopted from India; grew up in Denmark and very recently moved to Ashdown. speaks good english but doesn't understand much of american culture
  • owns a red british shorthair cat; a gift from her family upon moving to America
  • makes tiny cute felt animals as a way to deal with stress but doesn't really have any attachment to them so anyone who knows her will probably get gifted some at one point
  • likes jogging outside; the better the scenery, the better the run
  • enjoys playing video games; primarily Bioware games on console (playstation). is a huge fangirl and will gladly geek out with you
  • works in her aunt's store and currently lives with her aunt; looking to move out as soon as possible
  • appearance :: female, 181cm tall, wider than average hips, hazel eyes, dark skin and darker hair that goes all the way down to her waist. Prominent nose and slightly square jaw.
  • longer personality section :: Nazriya is one of life's great worriers; she takes looking after people very seriously because people are often s**t at looking after themselves and someone's gotta make sure they don't end up dead on the side of the road okay. She can be pretty forceful about this, as long as she thinks she's acting in someone's best interest. Naz really cares a great deal about other people and she likes to think she's also pretty sensible, at least on the whole - considering her habit of not actually being able to say no to people, that might be somewhat in dispute. But she's patient and kind and will happily listen to your woes for half the day and be your personal cheering squad for the other half.

    Beyond that, she's a sociable woman who likes gently teasing people and having a good laugh about life's oddities; her humour sometimes tends to the dry side, and despite being sociable she has a habit of bottling up the problems that hits closest to home. It's a habit from a lifetime spent trying to be the perfect responsible daughter - she doesn't like to burden others with her issues, not wanting to be a disappointment to those she loves.

    She's normally quite confident and on the days where she's feeling less so her motto is usually 'fake it until you make it'.
PostPosted: Tue Jun 14, 2016 5:25 pm


Changed power from 'cats everywhere' to 'glittering style' since I had an idea for where I want her magic to eventually go!

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PostPosted: Wed Jun 15, 2016 6:35 am


ephebe


Hey!! I think you have a good core here and you just need to expand on it a bit.

High Concept- The concept itself looks good and balanced, as well as connecting well to her Trouble. I'm just not sure the title 'Withdrawn Vexer' really fits. By noting her sociability it counters being 'withdrawn'. Perhaps something along the lines of 'Self-sufficient' or a variation fits her more? Also the word Vex has more of a negative view than just playful teasing. The word combo seems very negative for someone who seems pretty fun and nice!

Trouble- This is a decent trouble so please try and expand on it. Explore a little how this has affected her with friends and family, and perhaps if she recognizes it about herself and possibly if theres any acknowledgment of it or effort to correct it on her part. Remember this is the core of your character's personal journey!

Power- The power itself seems fine, just gonna nitpick that you put the power name in the appropriate header (replace 'POWER' with 'GLITTERING STYLE' as per the established format).
PostPosted: Wed Jun 15, 2016 7:21 am


iloveyouDIE


Hi, thank you so much for the crit!!! <3333333333

High Concept- Yah, you're completely right - to be honest I sort of settled on it because I couldn't think of anything else haha. Thank you for the suggestion! I changed it to 'self-sufficient tease' - I wanted to use 'teaser' but apparently that's not a word haha.

Trouble- I expanded on it! ouob

Power- gdkflgkjd brainfart moment, fixed now!

I hope the new changes look better. *u* Thank you for your time!!

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 16, 2016 7:32 am


shibrogane


take a look when u can ty biggrin
PostPosted: Sat Jun 25, 2016 7:13 pm


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Ephebe

PostPosted: Sun Sep 18, 2016 1:20 pm


iloveyouDIE


hi!! <33 made a trouble change, would you look it over again? emotion_bigheart thank you!
PostPosted: Sun Sep 18, 2016 6:43 pm


Ephebe


The trouble revision looks alright, but I wonder if the title couldn't be edited to reflect more that her bleeding heart is actually hurting her. Caring too much isn't really the trouble, it's that its killing her! (A suggestion I think sounds cool?: BLEEDING HEART, BLEEDING OUT )

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Ephebe

PostPosted: Mon Sep 19, 2016 7:39 am


iloveyouDIE


ahhh I love that, thank you!! *A* title changed <33
PostPosted: Mon Sep 19, 2016 7:42 am


shibrogane


player revised character trouble before playing as a dreamer surprised
looking for re-approval

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PostPosted: Mon Sep 19, 2016 9:54 am


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