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I put together a 'poem'* from my character's point of view. It was a character that I just thought of as I was falling asleep. Anyway, I hope this is the right forum, if any, to put something written in a character's point of view.

'Poem' from Katelyn's point of view

Daddy was the man that I thought he wasn't,
three officers under the law,
arrests made,
justice served.

---- About Katelyn's dad, Katelyn is a character I wanted to create. Eric, Katelyn's father, is a thief who murdered someone during an armed robbery; he was also drunk. Please let me know if this little bit of character info is ok. I haven't decided much about Katelyn, or even any of the other characters, but I wrote this 'poem' from Katelyn's point of view. Again, it's about Eric.

There, copied and pasted all of it. Sorry if this is the wrong forum, or if it's bulky. I just needed advice on how to make the poem better. I wanted to build my character around the poem

*The reason for the ' ' s around the word poem are that I was never actually taught to write a poem. It wasn't part of any school curriculum or whatever in any school I went to.

Again, sorry for the bulk sweatdrop

Yikes that's a lot of text and stuff that I have to quote. Anywho, Thanks for saying you liked it. Any ways I could try to improve it? I know it's supposed to be from a character's point of view, but I don't really 'know' the character well enough. Y'know?