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 Posted: Fri May 25, 2012 1:43 pm
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Chapter 1
The noise
Sara jumped down from the tree. Twigs snapped underneath her feet, breaking the silence of the woods.
"Sam?" She called out in a loud whisper.
He didn't answer. She sighed. That normally meant he'd found something. She crouched down. If he was in earshot, so was the animal.
But he would've heard me jump, right? That would mean the food heard too... "Sam!" She called again, louder.
What she heard in return was a soft ruhruh-ing thing. It was gradually getting louder by the second. It changed frequency, going higher and quicker. She ran towards it.
The tree line up ahead stopped her. The edge of the woods... They weren't supposed to cross it cause of the chance of getting hit. But she'd never seen anything on the cracked, gray road.
She crept to the edge, just close enough to see the road through the trees. The sound was deafening now. She coved her ears, looked left and right, and froze.
It wasn't even far away- it was just feet away from her. And then it was gone- speeding away. But it was definitely carrying a person. The blur seemed to slow the farther away it got. It was definitely a person.
"What the hell was that?"
Sara jumped. She didn't notice Sam father down to the left.
He'd heard it too...
Sam turned to her. "It scared the food away." He said simply.
Just then the sun broke through the clouds. Sam looked up, blocking the sun from his dark eyes. His dirty brown hair stuck to the branches. "Might as well cross now..." He looked down the road again. Nothing. He carefully put one foot up on the asphalt.
"Be careful..." Sara sighed.
He waved her off and nodded. "Shh..." He lunged forward, sprinting across the two-lane. It took only five seconds. He dove into the trees on the other side. A few seconds later he poked his head through the bushes. "Come on."
She walked into the light. The sun warmed her arms and face. Her hair felt heavier in the light. She threw her foot down onto the road and turned to where the person had came from.
She heard Sam laugh. "What?" She glared at him.
"That pose." He replied. "Makes you look cute."
Sara blushed. "Shut up... Move."
He disappeared into the woods.
Close your eyes. Inhale. It's only six steps. you've done it a hundred times. Exhale. Open your eyes. She stepped forward. Step. Step. Step...
She stopped. The sun hit her from an angle.
"What the hell are you doing?" Sam jumped out of the woods. "You're gonna get hit if you stand there!" He ran onto the road, taking two steps up to her. "Come on!" He grabbed her arm, pulling her towards the tree line.
"Wait." She didn't move. "Listen."
Sam cocked his head. "I don't hear anything."
Sara smiled. "Exactly. We'll be fine."
"I'm not standing here after that thing earlier. It could come back."
"We'll hear it if it does. Stop worrying."
"Sara, no. Stop being stupid." Sam gave her his 'not amused' look.
Sara sighed. "Fine." She said sadly.
He led her into the woods. After a while he let go of her hand. "I'm sorry... But I don't want to take any chances if it coms back. What if it was one of the Scapers?"
"They only live in the city..."
"And they always move to other cities. How do you think they get there?"
Sara shrugged. "We didn't get any food." She said, changing the subject.
"They have to go through our parts to get to where they want to go. And I'd rather them be in the city than killing the woods."
"We have to kill to live too..." She knew what was coming next. They always had this argument when she tried to make him stand in the road. She'd only been as far as sitting on the road.. She was too scared to actually lay on it. It would take too long to get up and run if a Scaper came.
"Sara. I'm not arguing with you. I've told you, and the Elders have told you. Now enough." Sam walked ahead of her, carrying his knife.
She ran her fingers across her own knife. "They seem like normal people." She muttered.
"Ya, til they fill your head with lies about society, economics, and their theories of spreading-"
"You always repeat what the Elders say and you never think for yourself! There has to be a reason that the Elders don't le the Scapers! And I doubt it's because they try to bring back the city."
"Cities are what the Elders hate! That's exactly why they don't trust the Scapers!"
tbc?
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Posted: Sat Jun 23, 2012 10:10 am
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SkeletonFiesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Jun 25, 2012 3:54 pm
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Posted: Wed Jun 27, 2012 10:11 am
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Kia Sai AiRozu-chan Really good Kia-kun :3 Try to stay away from having too many simple sentences. Try making them more complex or longer or more detail or something. "What she heard in return was a soft ruhruh-ing thing. It was gradually getting louder by the second. It changed frequency, going higher and quicker. She ran towards it." had too many simple sentences, for example. It reminds me of Hunger Games. I had too much of an issue reading it because of all the simple sentences and a few other reasons. Besides that, i like it. Im interested. Write more ^^ D: i know i have a problem with short sentences... if i try to make them longer, they end up being run-ons.... DX idk if i should finish up the chapter or what :/
finish it. or ill be mad. |
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SkeletonFiesta Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2012 5:14 pm
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