dead and alone no more

• Artist: jortiz14
• Description: if you comment be honest ok i wana see if this is a good poem for a class of mine
• Date: 11/13/2009
• Tags: dead alone more

Hate was the feeling I felt
I hated everything including my self
She left me
She tore my heart in half.
She left me dead inside
Only me,
All alone,
Dead inside
I couldn’t take it
The madness was getting to me
This feeling was driving me crazy
Just giving up on every thing
Only me,
All alone
Dead inside
Crying all night and fighting all day
I was hurt inside
I thought I’d be like this forever
Only me
All alone
Dead inside

Until I met her
She was beautiful to me
Her eyes wear bright like the moon
Her voice like birds singing in the sky
She had become my new drug
I was addicted to her and only her
With her kiss she brought me down to my knees
She was the one for me
She heald my heart that was torn in half
Id fallen in love once more
Not only me,
She was with me,
I wasn’t alone anymore

Comments

[Sesskogaru]

awwwwwwwwwww...that is so sweet! I love it. heart And yea you shoul submit this poem because it is really good. *smiles*

[bubbles53577]

thats really sweet dont listen to bloodygirl17, its a really nice poem

[bloodygirl17]

This is a good poem but, I would work on it. Plus it's also just a run on of every other poem I read. "She hurt me", "he broke my heart". It's all getting old, and frankly unamussing.