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I quickly run through the doors,
only able to watch in horror
as my life, my love, and my very existence is torn.
He now lay at my feet
cold and lifeless, I was not able to breath.
My hand slowly gripped his
as I let the anger set in.
how could he?
He had no right!
But now he has made me see the light.
He grips my shoulders tight
even though it wouldn’t be much of a fight
I stare blankly into his eyes
this is now the man I shall always despise.
But for now all I can do is wait
and see when to unleash my hate.
- by carlisle cullen lover |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/15/2008 |
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- Title: only time will tell
- Artist: carlisle cullen lover
- Description: hay all you people. i'm getting good at this. i wrote this a day after i found out that i was.....in over my head with some things. i wish i coulsd explain it better but i cant. sorry.
- Date: 12/15/2008
- Tags: love loath
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Corlea - 12/04/2009
- Wow! That was great! I could see the scene and feel what you were feeling. More! More!
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- Ryan Russell - 12/20/2008
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Awww. Sad! I don't think I need an explanation for this one, cuz it was pretty clear as far as I'm concerned!
The only thing Kitten said that I agree with is that there were a few typos-but who cares if there's a few typos if the piece is as excellent as yours??? (anybody can fix typos, but only the talented can write good poetry!!!) 5/5! - Report As Spam
- Gasoline-angel - 12/17/2008
- Oh shaddup Kitten Kokain Toyotomi you old hag you couldn't tell the difference between a great piece of writing and a cow!
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- HUMIDIFIER - 12/17/2008
- getting good at what? there's incorrect conjugations, capitalization seems random, rhyme seems forced with no reason, and all of it is trite. there's nothing worth reading here.
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- Gasoline-angel - 12/15/2008
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EH???
I'll ask you tommorow and you better explain!!!
5/5 cause ur mah frind! - Report As Spam
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