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he lights the candle to humanity to me
its like i cant see without him
even if he doesnt know that
its well.... true
when i look into the mirror all i can see is him next to me
i think im crazy
but i have another side
the other side thinks that im empty hearted
both of them are sad but i dont think about that
i think about him and mostly only him
i stare into his eyes
i look at the back of his head, his neck, his back, his shoulders when hes not looking
just wishing
wanting
HIM!
humanity
it hold thing together
but without light
its like a balloon floating away
but when lite comes
your life will turn around
- by love or dont love me |
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- | Submitted on 12/12/2008 |
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- Title: candle to humanity
- Artist: love or dont love me
- Description: i wrote this after i supposivly broke up and still feel the same way even though hes done weirder things than me but how to describe my life now, it would be like twilight and he would be edward and i cant let him go and hes drawing me in and im bella having to deal with this temptation
- Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: candle humanity
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Voldemort point two - 03/14/2009
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Rowanseth is an idiot, and Tasty Crayons is right.
I'd give it a 0, but I can't go that low. Please, learn to write. And put POETRY in the POETRY section. - Report As Spam
- karm_trebolo - 12/25/2008
- Wow that IS harsh.... I agree with Tasty Crayons it's kind of a bad comparison it's not even close to the relationship between Edward and Bella
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- Rowanzeith of Wyndrivver - 12/13/2008
- wow, harsh! i think the lack of capitalization kinda adds to the sadness, and it's a poem, so punctuation isnt really necessary. i'd say 4/5
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- Tasty Crayons - 12/12/2008
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I'll be honest - your comparison to Twilight with your stupid romance is just pathetic. You are not Bella and he is not Edward - it is fiction and your romance will be fiction soon, too.
Learn to use capitals, learn to spell, and learn how to use periods, or, maybe a few exclamation/question marks? Damn, read a book. How are so many of you so bad at this writing business. Most of you speak the language, so learn how to write it like an intelligent person. - Report As Spam